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Trapped Inside This Lullaby (I'm Your Daughter Not Your Mum)

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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 05-19-2009 02:52 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine

This poem's dedicated to my NOT SO DARLING mother, who i returned home for.. (i've been travling) Seems's she's left my dad and got involved with an idiot who belts her up..

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Busted, Broken, Bare and Bleeding
This lullaby has copped a beating
Tangled, Tortured, Tattered, Torn
Another memory left to mourn

Sorry, Selfish, Sexist Lies
We all see past his disguise
Humour, Hatred, Horror, Hurt
I've watched him push you in the dirt

But mangled promises hold you fast
Trapped inside your wrongful past
So close your eyes and go to sleep
I'll dry the acid that you weep

The truth is that you'll never learn
With all these memories left to burn
For you'll be back tommorrow night
After all you'll never win this fight

So open up your precious eyes
Your living in a world of lies
Sheltered from the life you live
There's no more left of me to give

I'm done with all the sleepless nights
Cause your too scared to dim the lights
So this is it i guess i'm done
I'm too ashamed to call you mum

It's not my fault that you left dad
For some other guy that treats you bad
You made your bed and now you'll lie
Trapped inside this lullaby
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Falling rain
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1 posted 05-19-2009 12:50 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Library..

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

kindredspirit
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2 posted 05-19-2009 08:38 PM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

-this poem is quite profound, and your emotions are portrayed clearly through very vivid imagery while telling her story.
-the rhythm is not quite perfect, but the rhyming is well done.
XxForever.BrokenxX
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3 posted 05-20-2009 06:38 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Breathtaking write Jess. I absolutely love it. I was thinking as I read it that it would sound great as a song too.
Just a thought.
hang in there,

Library

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

Rosie_Orange
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4 posted 05-21-2009 02:05 PM       View Profile for Rosie_Orange   Email Rosie_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosie_Orange

honest and cutting edge! really well written!
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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5 posted 06-09-2009 09:26 AM       View Profile for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed

wow, chilled me Jess, completly. Gosh I've missed this place. It was beautiful, in a sad way. I love it, Library!

missed you bunches!

-Kate

"What are you!?"
"I'm complicated."

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6 posted 06-16-2009 02:15 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

really beautiful poem Jess, You always write with a haunting truth I love your work.
Earl Robertson
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7 posted 06-17-2009 02:01 AM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

OH MY GOODNESS!!!!
That was Amazing Revenge!
Best of luck with your mother...

My melancholy is purely my own

 
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