Virginity, Life, Busted Bones and Bruises (Nicoles Poem)

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RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2009-05-18 08:33 AM

I'm not sure if this post pushes guidelines here..And i'm sorry if it does. but i'm not sorry for writing it.. So many kids are in situation simlar if not the same as this one and the ones that aren't are the people like me, the guys or girls picking up the broken hearts left behind by the people who say anything to get exactly what they want. This poem is for nicole.. my friend, the girl i could have saved from the bragging rights of a teenage boy that i'm sincerly ashamed to call my brother.

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For all the words i wished i said
For all the times i shook my head
For all the days i've watched you hurt
When He Treated You Like Dirt

For all the hearts i've watched him break
For all the scar's he's yet to make
For all dreams that i've watched die
Everytime he made you cry...

For all the years that i've let pass
For all the sorry's that never last
For all the hopes that i once had
When he promised not to make you sad

For all the love you had in him
For all the the times he made you sin
For all the words i have to say
I'm sorry that it turned out this way

For all the busted bones you've seen
For all the bruises he didn't mean
For the viginity that you let him take
For Your heart that i watched him break

But this rhyme it's just not good enough
He's left you drowing out at sea
Exhausted, Tired, Broken
By the boy he'll always be

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-05-18 12:34 PM

"Sin" and "way" don't rhyme hon.

lol
I love the last stanza. Very very good.

I hope Nicole is doing better..

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

Rosie_Orange
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since 2009-04-20

Posts 46
South Africa

2 posted 2009-05-18 04:03 PM

wow... its so honest! normally i don't really like rhyming poems but yours is really poignant and truthful... it feels like i'm experiencing it! well done i love it!

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2009-05-18 04:34 PM

Jess you never seem to disappoint me. You always write amazing poetry.
Love you hun,

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
{~~*~~}

JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

4 posted 2009-05-18 05:22 PM

It's so painful to watch those we care about make mistakes that hurt themselves and others. A very poignant and well written poem!

Kalysta
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since 2009-04-02

Posts 41
Ohio

5 posted 2009-05-18 08:15 PM

Its a really sad poem for sure, but extrememly good. I can totally relate to it. I hope Nicole moves on. It will take time though, it took me almost a year.

Best of luck,
~Kalysta~

~Kalysta~

HersheyKiss
Member

since 2008-06-02

Posts 137
New Jersey

6 posted 2009-05-18 08:19 PM

JESSSS!!!!

Amazing poem as usual. Hope things are going better.

~DANI~

nehematala
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since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

7 posted 2009-05-21 03:57 PM

This is an amazing poem. sad but true

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

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