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Virginity, Life, Busted Bones and Bruises (Nicoles Poem)

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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 05-18-2009 08:33 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine

I'm not sure if this post pushes guidelines here..And i'm sorry if it does. but i'm not sorry for writing it.. So many kids are in situation simlar if not the same as this one and the ones that aren't are the people like me, the guys or girls picking up the broken hearts left behind by the people who say anything to get exactly what they want. This poem is for nicole.. my friend, the girl i could have saved from the bragging rights of a teenage boy that i'm sincerly ashamed to call my brother.

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For all the words i wished i said
For all the times i shook my head
For all the days i've watched you hurt
When He Treated You Like Dirt

For all the hearts i've watched him break
For all the scar's he's yet to make
For all dreams that i've watched die
Everytime he made you cry...

For all the years that i've let pass
For all the sorry's that never last
For all the hopes that i once had
When he promised not to make you sad

For all the love you had in him
For all the the times he made you sin
For all the words i have to say
I'm sorry that it turned out this way

For all the busted bones you've seen
For all the bruises he didn't mean
For the viginity that you let him take
For Your heart that i watched him break

But this rhyme it's just not good enough
He's left you drowing out at sea
Exhausted, Tired, Broken
By the boy he'll always be
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Falling rain
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1 posted 05-18-2009 12:34 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"Sin" and "way" don't rhyme hon. lol
I love the last stanza. Very very good. I hope Nicole is doing better..

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

Rosie_Orange
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2 posted 05-18-2009 04:03 PM       View Profile for Rosie_Orange   Email Rosie_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosie_Orange

wow... its so honest! normally i don't really like rhyming poems but yours is really poignant and truthful... it feels like i'm experiencing it! well done i love it!
XxForever.BrokenxX
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3 posted 05-18-2009 04:34 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Jess you never seem to disappoint me. You always write amazing poetry.
Love you hun,

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

JenniferMaxwell
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4 posted 05-18-2009 05:22 PM       View Profile for JenniferMaxwell   Email JenniferMaxwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JenniferMaxwell

It's so painful to watch those we care about make mistakes that hurt themselves and others. A very poignant and well written poem!
Kalysta
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5 posted 05-18-2009 08:15 PM       View Profile for Kalysta   Email Kalysta   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kalysta

Its a really sad poem for sure, but extrememly good. I can totally relate to it. I hope Nicole moves on. It will take time though, it took me almost a year.

Best of luck,
~Kalysta~

~Kalysta~

HersheyKiss
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6 posted 05-18-2009 08:19 PM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HersheyKiss

JESSSS!!!!

Amazing poem as usual. Hope things are going better.

~DANI~
nehematala
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7 posted 05-21-2009 03:57 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

This is an amazing poem. sad but true

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

 
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