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Falling rain
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0 posted 05-15-2009 06:57 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I read HersheyKiss's poem and it inspired me to write this.

Just An Ugly Face


Tell me something different
Like beauty doesn't count
That average is okay
And I have something to amount

You tell me I'm beautiful
Always inside and out
Why don't you stare at my eyes?
Your filling me with doubt

Do I not have "the body"?
Gain some muscles; become a stud
Knock down some IQ numbers
And speak like a dud

I read big books and wear glasses
Speak like I have a brain
But these standards you place on me
Are filling my heart with pain

Tell me I'm more then beautiful
Be honest and be true
Do I just not add up now?
Is it impossible for me to be you?

Tell me I'm something different
That average people have a place
In the end do you recognize me for me?
Or just some ugly face.


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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 05-15-2009 11:19 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Awe. I really like the last stanza.  
library

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

Kalysta
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2 posted 05-16-2009 01:32 PM       View Profile for Kalysta   Email Kalysta   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kalysta

OMG! I totally loved this. Totally going in the library!! Really good, no great write. =-D
~Kalysta~

~Kalysta~

Alison
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3 posted 05-16-2009 01:52 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Zach,

You are really growing as a poet.  This is very good.  When I think of the structure of your earlier poems and look at this one - I am so proud of you.  Zach, you have a lot to offer all of us.  It doesn't matter if we are not teens.  Your messages are strong.

Keep up the writing and know I am reading.

Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!


4 posted 05-16-2009 01:53 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

PS - I like your picture.
Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk
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5 posted 05-16-2009 08:19 PM       View Profile for Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk   Email Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk

I absolutely LOVE this poem,

"I read big books and wear glasses
Speak like I have a brain
But these standards you place on me
Are filling my heart with pain

Tell me I'm more then beautiful
Be honest and be true
Do I just not add up now?
Is it impossible for me to be you?

Tell me I'm something different
That average people have a place
In the end do you recognize me for me?
Or just some ugly face."is my favorite part.
  

We are all unique  in Jesus' eyes.

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6 posted 05-21-2009 07:53 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thanks guys for your replies!

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

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7 posted 05-21-2009 12:00 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

yep this is for sure, one of your better poems!

Rosie_Orange
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8 posted 05-21-2009 12:53 PM       View Profile for Rosie_Orange   Email Rosie_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosie_Orange

its amazing! i really loved it, and you made rhyme work with you not against you!! wow..
nehematala
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9 posted 05-21-2009 03:44 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

oh my gosh this poem describes how I felt going to public schools.

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

UNTAMEDelegance
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10 posted 06-01-2009 09:50 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

I loved this a lot!!! It really hits home at society's obsessive enchantment of looking good and not caring what's in the soul of a person. I really think that quite a few people will be able to emphasize with this poem. It was very, very good to read.
                  ~UNTAMEDelegance
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11 posted 06-08-2009 04:22 PM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

your rhythm was a little off, but overall this was a good write. the message definitely spoke to me, loud and clear.
 
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