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Re-redo of Don't Forget to Remember Me

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Kalysta
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0 posted 05-13-2009 04:31 PM       View Profile for Kalysta   Email Kalysta   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kalysta

Donít Forget to Remember Me

You take a deep breath and turn to leave.
A tear forms and falls down my cheek.
You see it and wipe it off with your sleeve.
I smile weakly and kiss you gently,
Knowing that you are not coming back.

I close my eyes and choke back a sob,
The tears streaming out of my eyes.
Iím trying to burn a picture of you in my head.
I don't want to forget you dark crazy hair.
Or your amazing grace.
And your sweet but shy smile,
It always seem like you had a little secret you were hiding behind it.
I guess you did have a secret.
It was that you were going to leave me here,
Lying face down in the dirt,
Ten times worse than the way you found me.
You pick me up,
And then you throw me down.
I feel like you have just thrown me off a 50 story building.

You look at me with those brown eyes.
All-full of shame.
I try not to look into them, but they call me to you,
Like they always do.
I donít want you to go but you say you have to.
I say you donít.

It seems impossible that a week ago we were just fine.
You were loving and affectionate as always.
I was my sweet shy self.
Now everything is a mess and you are leaving

I feel abandon and forgotten.
It doesnít seem fair.
But I guess that is how the world is,
Not fair.

You say itís for the best.
I say itís for the worst.
We are two halves of a whole us.
Without you Iím a whole broken me.
I just pray that you don't forget to remember me.

~Kalysta~


~Kalysta~

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1 posted 05-16-2009 12:01 AM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Wow, I think this is even better than the original. And I really liked that one.
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It always seem like you had a little secret you were hiding behind it.
I guess you did have a secret.
It was that you were going to leave me here
______________________

That part reminds me of part of a song that my Dad wrote for me when I was little.

"Blue eye's, we'll see changes
with the passing of time.
But one day you'll look into
my eye's and see that
I'm sill in love with you."

I found the lyrics to my song a month or two ago, and when I read that I just started bawling 'cause he left about...four years ago. And when I showed my mom she asked me,
"Do you think he knew?"

But yea, fantastic write.
Library.

{~~*~~}


Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}
Kalysta
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2 posted 05-16-2009 01:24 PM       View Profile for Kalysta   Email Kalysta   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kalysta

Thanks so much. I'm still working on it a little bit. It needs tweaked a little. Some things still dont sound right to me.
~Kalysta~

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