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To Be With You, Forever, Thats. It.

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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 05-08-2009 12:45 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

This is an attempt, nothing more. I was sort of inspired by the song My Name Is Trouble by Nightmare Of You. I just twisted it a bit...hope you like it.
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I want to hold your hand Pictures, Images and Photos

Step, step, step...
and with that,
I move forward;
past everyone else.

These streets are a blur
while I start to run.
I can't focus,
I can't remember.

All I need is you,
I need to hold your hand,
to know that I'll be safe.
The world is after me.

I don't care about that,
all I need is you,
with me forever.
Thats it.

This is the last time,
that I'll be here.
I'm leaving this place,
will you come with me?

By the look on your face,
the answer is obvious.
All I need is you,
forever, thats it.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

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1 posted 05-09-2009 10:25 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

To be honest Julianna.. This poem was sorta a cliche. But the working in this was alright. Keep writing.

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

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