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I don't know if this will make any sense to you but here it is,


Life is as blue as a question mark,
And as rough as chocolate pudding.
The problems bombarding my brain
Are as common as grass,
They make me pray like wet dogs,
And shake like howling wolves.

My mind is as nervous as jell-o,
And as perky as a plump pig
Begging to be shot.
I'm as eager as acne
And sure as a squirrel,
That my life will always be,
As blue as a question mark.

"A poem should not mean
But be."      
          -Archibald MacLeish      

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1 posted 04-26-2009 04:20 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Oh my Christine, Bob will be in FV heaven when he reads this.  You clearly "get" it.  You are starting to think "out-of-the-box" now, mixing your sensory poetic data up nicely and coming up with some original and interesting images in the form of a simile list poem.  Great fun (apart maybe from the poor pig).  "As eager as acne" !  I bet no-one wrote that before.  

Does it make "sense"?  Humm, I don't think this is a question you should need, or even want, to ask about contemporary poems.  

Does it speak to the senses? YES!

Well done.
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2 posted 04-26-2009 04:56 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

This is kind of funny Christine:

From you:
quote:
I don't know if this will make any sense to you but here it is,


From your signature quote:
quote:
"A poem should not mean
But be."      
          -Archibald MacLeish    



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lol, I guess it's kinda funny.

Anyways, I'm glad that I finally "get" it and I did have a lot of fun writing this.

"A poem should not mean
But be."      
          -Archibald MacLeish      

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