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I look up to the dark, bleak, sky
Searching for you there
I stare at ever cloud to see a face
with eyes that gaze back in care

I listen on the wind
To hear you whisper out my name
To find myself wrapped in memories
That still ended up the same

I caress your little picture
In your eyes you try to hide
Killing as I remember every promise
That is hurting me inside

I can trace your very lips
Press upon my porcelain skin
Without a hand to trace the feeling
Noticing the battle I can't win

I can see it now as I fall asleep
That my dreams are of your perfection
A voice without a sound, A heart with no love
Your immortal being without a reflection




  
(I got the name and last line from the song My Immortal by Evanescence. I don't really like this poem.. But its been a while since I wrote something. )
© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-24-2009 08:10 PM       View Profile for Suncleaver   Email Suncleaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suncleaver

I enjoyed this poem Zach, it was articulately melancholic. Good to see you posting again, although the evanescence title threw me a bit. Try listening to some My Dying Bride or Anathema, that will make you write something really miserable :p
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It was a little confusing, but i liked it.
good write,

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Emmalee Janelle
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