Thank you very much for your crit, it helps me so much knowing exactly what i can improve on and also how to improve.
Im afraid to say, i have no experiance in metre whatsoever. Before i came to this forum i never knew that such a thing even existed in poetry terms. So any pointers or excersises on metre would be very much appriaciated. I don't want to sound completely clueless, but what is slant and internal rhyme?
Sorry for all the questions. We don't do a great deal of poetry in school, and the stuff we do learn isnt really about writing it, it's more about studying it.