You progress in leaps and bounds. We all at some point write poems about poems and your effort here is much better than many I have seen. You've seized on an aspect of writing poetry which is very important, perhaps the most important aspect; how to write with true emotion and feeling yet at the same time write well. Avoiding mere clinical words and empty, though grammatically correct, poetry is something we have to be wary of as we learn about techniques such a playing with line breaks, pauses, tension, and all the paraphernalia associated with sound. The couple of lines which say it all are:
"But in the end what do they mean,
If nothing lies between the lines,"
That is stunning stuff Christine, and shows that you are really thinking now about poetry and what it is to be a poet. I'm impressed.
I like to think of making a poem as the same as making a sculpture or painting. An artist has to learn the technical side of paint and clay and the brushes and tools, how to use them, how to sharpen and clean them etc., and at first it is true that learning the mechanics may get in the way of the creativity and emotion.
But one day, having learned those basic skills, they become instinctive so that the painter will simply paint. Expressing his or her heart in the painting, yet using the skills she or he has learned to produce something wonderful.
As it happens I think that this already excellent little poem could be improved, but I don't know whether you would want to work on it or not?
Incidentally I don't know if you've seen what Bob and Jenn and I are doing in the Alley. There's a couple of threads, but one of them has got a bit entangled with discussions about CA which are boring!, the other one is this:
If you feel like posting something, preferably free verse, it would be great to have your contribution.
PS As we are talking about poems about poems, you might like this if you haven't seen it before: