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Octave
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0 posted 04-13-2009 05:55 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Octave

Urban Decay

Let’s burn down this city
Tear it hand in hand
We’ll draw something pretty
All over the land and

We’ll chew up the ashes
And choke on the lights
And when the world crashes
We’ll break up the fight

We’ll dance on the cracks
In the pavement and mind
And we’ll lie on our backs
And we’ll see what we find

And the city will weep
And we will just laugh
All motion shall sleep
On fury’s behalf

Who’s counting and crying
As we spin through decay
And we’ve given up trying
As city screams dismay

Hello urban breakdown
Come and see us smile
Just take a look around
At our uninspired style

Paint runs through the drains
And we sing in broken streets
And the city cries disdain
As this is where we meet

Let’s burn down this city
Let’s burn it down for good
And we’ll say what a pity
Because no one understood.
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1 posted 04-16-2009 04:50 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Hi Octave

Pretty catchy meter, and a good strong message too.  In my head when I read this my mind is dying to put it to music - would make great lyrics.  I can just see Dire Straits doing it; but then I bet you don't remember them .

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2 posted 04-17-2009 12:38 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Yes, it does seem quite singysongy. I play guitar and have recently started putting some of my poetry to music, i might try it with this.

Believe it or not, i listen to the Dire Straits. Haha, the old music isn't completely lost you know.
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3 posted 04-17-2009 05:18 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Thank god for that   Just been listening to Your Latest Trick - I love that track, and Mark Knopfler is the greatest guitarist ever.
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4 posted 04-19-2009 05:45 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

I LOVE HOW YOU RHYME. ITS AWESOME HOW YOU CAN GET IT TO FLOW SO WELL. WONDERFUL WORK!

I'm lost and going nowhere i need help to find my way

Rosie_Orange
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5 posted 04-23-2009 03:44 PM       View Profile for Rosie_Orange   Email Rosie_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosie_Orange

you're such an amazing poet... i really like this poem, the way your rhyming doesn't make it sound babyish but rather assists in making the poem better..
and i agree, i think it would make an amazing song!! (:
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6 posted 04-23-2009 07:56 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

THIS FREAKING ROCKS!!!

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