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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 2009-04-12 02:44 PM


Another day has come and go.
With the pain of depression
becoming very realistic,
this choice was yours
now why'd you take it?

5:00 came the call,
where to meet and where to start.
The plan seemed so perfect...
just a little partying,
nothing to kill you.

Once we arrived everything
just went downhill.
People sold and we bought.
It was a simple act
of selling our lives.

We were on a joyride
filled with drugs and alcohal.
Pure adrenaline kept us going,
but now I'm starting to see
what's our final destination.

When the night's high was over,
you chose to drive
and I chose to come.
Why were we so stupid?
Why didn't we care?

It's morning now,
and I'm lying here in this room.
As I look to my left an empty bed
is being cleaned up.
You're gone--always will be.

Now while everyone's crying,
I'm wondering what happened.
Where did our sanity go?
What made us chose to do the unthinkable?
Why did you have to die?

This world is all thats left,
you're gone up in heaven now.
Pain and suffering is the
last of your knowledge.
So I'll see you when the white sun rises...

I don't know when that will be,
but I know I'll never do this again.
This wasn't my idea...
this isn't who I am,
but I'll still have to pay for my actions.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

© Copyright 2009 Julianna - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
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1 posted 2009-04-12 11:18 PM


Argh. thiis what i was saying... THIS IS some of ur best...

The lesson's we learn between life. loss. love and leaving.. sometimes te mistakes we make are more than likely the ones that define us as we grow older...

VERY GREAT work...


Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
Posts 422
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2 posted 2009-04-12 11:36 PM


thanks, i'm glad you liked it!
i wrote this for a contest back in november...forgot to enter it, and didn't finish it, lol. then while i was looking through all of my older stuff i found it and decided to end it.
now i'm glad i did

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England
3 posted 2009-04-13 01:27 PM


Strange how one can find beauty in sorrow, because that's what this poem is.

Nice to see you posting again Julianna.

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4 posted 2009-04-13 03:14 PM


I have to agree with with Luke. Very beautiful.

-Zach

We all flirt with the tiniest notion of self-conclusion in one simple motion.  

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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5 posted 2009-04-13 03:41 PM


thanks zach, its good to finally hear from you again, lol.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

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