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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 04-10-2009 05:34 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

Based on the song "Open Happiness" by tons of different artists that made the "Coca-Cola" commercial, lol...this is an attempt, and only that, lol. Nothing good really came from it.


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Mmmmmm...
and with a simple sound,
we stretch our arms and reach.
Reach for the stars.

The harder you look,
your eyes focus and its clear.
Clear that the stars are close,
so close you can feel their heat.

The warmth spreads
through your limbs and around
your body.
A heavenly feeling.

Nothing else matters,
you have this sense of open-ness,
a feeling of open happiness.
The stars start to dance.

Dancing down the street,
smiles on everyone's faces.
The sunshine sings its song,
and the clouds rain with joy.

It's a brand new day,
time for some more open happiness.
Another smile on someone's face,
another rainbow bridge.

Thank you stars for making
the world happy together.
This is a better way of living,
this is open happiness.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

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Suncleaver
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1 posted 04-12-2009 12:15 PM       View Profile for Suncleaver   Email Suncleaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suncleaver

I quite liked it Julianna.
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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thanks luke.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

RevengeIsMine
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3 posted 04-12-2009 11:16 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

mmm... Some parts i liked.. some i didn't... i think the whole thing is def not your best... but still a good write..

x
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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4 posted 04-12-2009 11:32 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

yeah, i know. i wrote this because i was really hyper. and listening to this song made me inspired. everytime i read it over, i keep finding more and more places where it could've been better, lol...
thanks for the "critique"!

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

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