Yeah, I like this, but the lines in between your stanza's, I think, didn't work so well. Maybe if it was a refrain, repeating a line, like your first single line stanza,
"And donít be shocked when heís gone."
If you replaced the other's with this line, it might sound better.
Jesus loves you! Don't believe it? Then at least believe that I love you! I may not know you, but you're a person too, and you deserve to be loved.