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Falling rain
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0 posted 03-20-2009 07:42 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Okay so its 6 in the morning here and I felt like writing. So this is practically words flowing out of my head trying to write something that doesn't make sense...

Visible to the Blind

Broken, chapped lips call for help
Blood shot eyes scream for sanity
Caught within the stories I write
Chocking on every guilt I bear

Responsibilities to for-fill
Lost within heavy thoughts
Each killing, tearing at my shell  
Leaving my heart; drained empty

Fake smiles worn to no end
Happiness at my door
Sitting within my doubt
The pain only visible to the blind
© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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NICE!!

Free-writes work for you.
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2 posted 03-20-2009 01:06 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thanks Michaela! I really liked my title. But to me the whole poem doesn't have like a story but eh, whatever. I'll get over it.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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Wow, I love your title and your poem too.

I liked the 1st stanza the best

Jesus loves you! Don't believe it? Then at least believe that I love you! I may not know you, but you're a person too, and you deserve to be loved.

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free style is always the more diverse one, i believe, nicely done

Lana xoxoxo
 
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