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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 2009-03-17 02:22 AM


I do not feel this way right now at all, but I think this is something I would have written about 3 to 4 months ago.

Topic:Death Inside


Why do I still feel pulses inside
When I clearly cannot breathe
Within my skin I am dead
But blood still rides the streams

The pain deep within each cell
Still haunts the past I knew
The place I now call hell
But the past won't say it's true

The mighty organ past my chest
Tells me I'm still alive
But the hurt beyond all the rest
Whispers that it's a lie

I know I truly died inside
'Cause I can't breathe any longer
And though in God, I confide
It doesn't make me any stronger




No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

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prettypinkrebel
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1 posted 2009-03-17 11:23 AM


Thank you thank you thank you!!! oyu just described exactally how I feel

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
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2 posted 2009-03-17 04:15 PM


Wow...Love the last stanza. Love it. Love it. Love it.
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3 posted 2009-03-17 04:25 PM


Geez! I'm jealous.. you can sooo write better then i can.. >.< lol

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

freeand2sexy
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4 posted 2009-03-17 10:19 PM


Thanks my friends.

And Prettypinkrebel, I don't know you really, but you can be my friend, too.

Well, only if you want.

No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

prettypinkrebel
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5 posted 2009-03-19 08:45 AM


Yes. Deffinetly!! Im always up for making new friends
freeand2sexy
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6 posted 2009-03-19 12:56 PM


YAY I made a new friend (I'm smiling like crazy.) lol

No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

RevengeIsMine
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7 posted 2009-03-19 11:19 PM


THIS IS AMAZING!.. i'm insainly jealous that this is not my work!!.. well done sweetie!


freeand2sexy
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8 posted 2009-03-19 11:23 PM


Thank you, hey you want to be my friend too, lol!

you seem like a really cool person!

Jesus loves you! Don't believe it? Then at least believe that I love you! I may not know you, but you're a person too, and you deserve to be loved.

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