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Within my skin I am dead (freewrite #3)

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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 03-17-2009 02:22 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

I do not feel this way right now at all, but I think this is something I would have written about 3 to 4 months ago.

Topic:Death Inside


Why do I still feel pulses inside
When I clearly cannot breathe
Within my skin I am dead
But blood still rides the streams

The pain deep within each cell
Still haunts the past I knew
The place I now call hell
But the past won't say it's true

The mighty organ past my chest
Tells me I'm still alive
But the hurt beyond all the rest
Whispers that it's a lie

I know I truly died inside
'Cause I can't breathe any longer
And though in God, I confide
It doesn't make me any stronger




No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!
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1 posted 03-17-2009 11:23 AM       View Profile for prettypinkrebel   Email prettypinkrebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prettypinkrebel

Thank you thank you thank you!!! oyu just described exactally how I feel

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

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2 posted 03-17-2009 04:15 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Wow...Love the last stanza. Love it. Love it. Love it.
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3 posted 03-17-2009 04:25 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Geez! I'm jealous.. you can sooo write better then i can.. >.< lol

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

freeand2sexy
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4 posted 03-17-2009 10:19 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thanks my friends.

And Prettypinkrebel, I don't know you really, but you can be my friend, too.

Well, only if you want.

No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

prettypinkrebel
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5 posted 03-19-2009 08:45 AM       View Profile for prettypinkrebel   Email prettypinkrebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prettypinkrebel

Yes. Deffinetly!! Im always up for making new friends
freeand2sexy
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6 posted 03-19-2009 12:56 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

YAY I made a new friend (I'm smiling like crazy.) lol

No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

RevengeIsMine
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7 posted 03-19-2009 11:19 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

THIS IS AMAZING!.. i'm insainly jealous that this is not my work!!.. well done sweetie!

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8 posted 03-19-2009 11:23 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thank you, hey you want to be my friend too, lol!

you seem like a really cool person!

Jesus loves you! Don't believe it? Then at least believe that I love you! I may not know you, but you're a person too, and you deserve to be loved.

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