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GothicCherry
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0 posted 2009-03-16 10:30 PM



Second plea in games of lust
drowns the first of pleas for trust.
Far from fair instants, delights.
Stupid girl: afraid of night.

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1 posted 2009-03-17 07:51 AM


"Second plea in game the of lust
drowns the first of pleas for trust.
Far from fair instant delights.
Stupid girl: afraid of what's right."

I liked this but I had to re-write it in the way I would of said it. But its still good the way you said it.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

GothicCherry
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2 posted 2009-03-17 08:20 AM


The way I said it had to deal with how my ex made me do a lot of stuff with him when I didn't want to. Long story. Just a vent.
Clockwork_Orange
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3 posted 2009-03-17 04:31 PM


wow. thats about all i can say.
Octave
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4 posted 2009-03-18 01:04 PM


I agree with Clockwork. This is amazing. Short but...sweet?
pen&paper
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5 posted 2009-03-22 01:02 PM


Again, with the awesomeness.
So amazing, as usual.

Cierra

GothicCherry
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6 posted 2009-03-22 01:44 PM


Thanks
Dark Star
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7 posted 2009-03-22 07:53 PM


says a lot in such little amounts, nice

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