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kiwie15:D
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i wish there were no violance
i don't think there's a point to it
people think its cool but
all it takes is just one hit

i want to make a difference
i want the world to see
another side of me

i hear and see the stories
i know how it all starts
just one little comment
and then there's no part

sometimes i think that people
don't hear or mean what they are saying
because at the end
they are the ones paying

it's sad how people dont understand
how not only they hurt themselves
that they hurt everyone else

i want the world to change
even if it's just a little
the world doesn't
have to be so brittle

this is the end
i hope you care
i can understand
if you just can't bare

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GothicCherry
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1 posted 03-11-2009 09:31 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

A lot of this is true.

I'd like to say just one thing. It's much easier to read a poem when it uses capital letters at the beginning of thoughts and puctuation where needed. Just a suggestion.
freeand2sexy
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I have to agree with Michaela here, but I'm sure there are people who would disagree with us. Nice poem!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

kiwie15:D
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Thank you and i will try that.

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