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0 posted 2009-03-10 09:15 PM


Okay this poem is an attempt to break my writers block. It's alright I think..

Whispering
Calling your name
I hear the voice
One and the same

It whispers doubt
Despair and dark fears
Its reasons understanding
Thoughts crystal clear

Its tongue a razor blade
Pressing on my skin
A battle left for the dead
Something I just can't win

A grip ghostly but tight
A hold on every mistake
Faintly reminding me
with every breath I take

Whispering
Voices of doubt
Filling my ears
With painful shouts

[This message has been edited by Falling rain (03-10-2009 09:51 PM).]

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1 posted 2009-03-10 09:58 PM


OMG!!!! zach this was...just wow. i'm speachless. i think you get the hint, lol .
library.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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2 posted 2009-03-10 10:15 PM


This is good Zach. Writer's block is so horrible, I hope you break yours for good.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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3 posted 2009-03-11 09:45 AM


I'm pretty sure your writer's block is over with Zach.
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4 posted 2009-03-11 09:57 AM


it is really good, but?  you ok?


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5 posted 2009-03-11 04:25 PM


Thanks for your comments guys.

Sea I'm having my struggles like anyone else. But its nothing too serious.

Thanks for caring

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

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