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shattered-smiles
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0 posted 03-10-2009 09:01 PM       View Profile for shattered-smiles   Email shattered-smiles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for shattered-smiles

Venom. Like stainless steel parting skin. Striking in her blood. Sheís bleeding. Bleeding to change. To change all the world around her. If just for an instant. Itís still worth it.

She just wants somewhere to go. Somewhere that isnít here. Somewhere where no one knows. Where sheís been.

Nowhere. Thereís no place to go. Not for her. Oh no. No one wants her. No one wants the girl in black. Lying at their fragile feet. Please. Wonít somebody take her. Take her away. Save her. Save her from herself. She needs your help. She canít do this on her own. Somebody help her.  

Silence. Nothing moves. Nothing stays. Just. Silent. Hush the crying infants. Cradle them in their mothersí arms. Hold them. Like theyíve never been held. Hold them. Like sheís never been held. Cradle their gentle face. Wipe away their glistening tears. Hold them.

Ultimately.

This disease is all thatís saving her.  



So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful...

[This message has been edited by shattered-smiles (03-11-2009 02:03 PM).]

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1 posted 03-10-2009 09:18 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I swear, reading this a second time just makes it even better. Tori I really like this poem. Keep up the writing hon!

Hold on,
-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 03-10-2009 09:48 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Damn Tori...

You just sent shivers up my spine...

I've not read something this agressive and meaniful in a long time.. it's AMAZING!..

Every single word just bounced right off the page and in my face.


AMAZING.. YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE.. lol..

freeand2sexy
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3 posted 03-10-2009 10:11 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

WOW, this is just wow, I'm speechless.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

GothicCherry
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4 posted 03-11-2009 09:40 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

"Save her from myself."

Is this supposed to say 'herself' or are you like trying to kill her??? Lol...Sorry just a thought.

I enjoyed this. From the looks of it, I'm not the only one.
fundip-cery
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5 posted 06-29-2009 12:22 AM       View Profile for fundip-cery   Email fundip-cery   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fundip-cery

This poem is amazing reading it over and over again and it doesnt get old
nehematala
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6 posted 07-01-2009 06:36 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

I love this poem its amazing but you do know that some people can't see red right?

The number one thing in acting is honesty: If you can fake that you've got it made.

priyanka
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7 posted 07-03-2009 07:40 AM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

speechless!!! perfect... its like its happening and right in front of me... wow! its hard to get it out that way... to make us feel as if it happens here... its like i feel her and know that feeling... how well you have put it... lovely
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