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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
Venom. Like stainless steel parting skin. Striking in her blood. She’s bleeding. Bleeding to change. To change all the world around her. If just for an instant. It’s still worth it. She just wants somewhere to go. Somewhere that isn’t here. Somewhere where no one knows. Where she’s been. Nowhere. There’s no place to go. Not for her. Oh no. No one wants her. No one wants the girl in black. Lying at their fragile feet. Please. Won’t somebody take her. Take her away. Save her. Save her from herself. She needs your help. She can’t do this on her own. Somebody help her. Silence. Nothing moves. Nothing stays. Just. Silent. Hush the crying infants. Cradle them in their mothers’ arms. Hold them. Like they’ve never been held. Hold them. Like she’s never been held. Cradle their gentle face. Wipe away their glistening tears. Hold them. Ultimately. This disease is all that’s saving her. So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful... [This message has been edited by shattered-smiles (03-11-2009 02:03 PM).] |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
I swear, reading this a second time just makes it even better. Tori I really like this poem.  Keep up the writing hon! Hold on, -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Damn Tori... You just sent shivers up my spine... I've not read something this agressive and meaniful in a long time.. it's AMAZING!.. Every single word just bounced right off the page and in my face. AMAZING.. YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE.. lol.. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
WOW, this is just wow, I'm speechless. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
"Save her from myself." Is this supposed to say 'herself' or are you like trying to kill her??? Lol...Sorry just a thought. I enjoyed this. From the looks of it, I'm not the only one. |
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fundip-cery New Member
since 2009-05-13
Posts 8 |
This poem is amazing reading it over and over again and it doesnt get old |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
I love this poem its amazing but you do know that some people can't see red right? The number one thing in acting is honesty: If you can fake that you've got it made. |
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priyanka Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216india |
speechless!!! perfect... its like its happening and right in front of me... wow! its hard to get it out that way... to make us feel as if it happens here... its like i feel her and know that feeling... how well you have put it... lovely |
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