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Just Look (you plus me)

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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 03-10-2009 05:21 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy


Omg, I was looking at my old poetry notebooks, and reading my old poems and wow, they were so horrible, it's so funny because I remember when I thought they were so good, well maybe they were for my age. I just wanted to share one with you guys. It's nothing much really, just a bunch of repition. Oh and no critiques please, you could tell me everthing that's wrong, but I won't change a single word.


Just look and you'll see,
It's you plus me.
It could last forever
Or just a week,
But just look
You'll see,
That it's still
You plus me.
Just look and you'll see
What I feel about you.
Just look,
Just see,
Look at what you feel,
About me.
Just look and you'll see
It's still you plus me.
Just look,
We're still together
And it could last forever,
If only you,
Would just look at me.


With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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GothicCherry
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1 posted 03-10-2009 05:36 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!

It's so funny cuz I have like 3 sounding just like this lol
freeand2sexy
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2 posted 03-10-2009 05:46 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Haha, that's funny, not that surprising, but funny none the less.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.
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3 posted 03-11-2009 08:38 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

lol. I got plenty poems like this.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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