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prettypinkrebel
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0 posted 03-10-2009 03:03 PM       View Profile for prettypinkrebel   Email prettypinkrebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for prettypinkrebel

Can this be real?
This emotion that has come so soon?
Can I really say i love you?
My friends keep telling me that time will tell all but the longer I wait the harder I fall
You rescued me from a heartbreak that tore me apart
And slowly you began to help in mending my heart..
I dont know if i want to tell you how i feel because i dont know where you would go
And I need you so
Your healing my heart and this pain that i feel
the only question is can this be real?
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1 posted 03-10-2009 03:08 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Ok, is the last line saying it's not real and you're wanting it to be? It completely threw me off.
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oh lol... sorry typo. thats suppose to be can!!
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Oh alright! I probably should have got that myself. Hehe...

Best of wishes!
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I like this, but again your missing punctuation in certain places. Punctuation is very important; it effects how the poem is read by the reader.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

 
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