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gdcod2player
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0 posted 2009-03-09 08:06 PM



Been broken with out sound
The girl I lost that night
She has a heart I can’t find
Where is she hiding from me?
How many nights’ must I lay awake?
I don’t want to waste my life
When can I stop looking for this beautiful girl?
I won’t find her again
The heart I want won’t be found
Is she testing to see if I understood?
The directions she gave me
Are they a map to show me where she’s at?
Or are they leading me back to where she stood
I feel like I can’t find her
I wonder if she’s figured it out
I won’t ever stop
Where is she?
Allyson I can’t hold back any longer
No matter how far away you are
I won’t ever give up or rest
The path I’ve built is going to keep on going
Till I run into your road
The road that has everything i want
the road that has a place to rest

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GothicCherry
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1 posted 2009-03-09 08:45 PM


I think this is pretty is a broken way. I like how it doesn't have much end rhyme. I'm not that big of a rhyming fan.
freeand2sexy
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2 posted 2009-03-10 03:29 AM


Well I'm the opposite of Michaela here, I love end rhyme, and don't like free verse so much, but I thought this was nice. I totally understood what you were saying in this poem.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

GothicCherry
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3 posted 2009-03-10 10:16 AM


Christine, it is truly amazing how we can be opposites yet still be so much alike.
freeand2sexy
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4 posted 2009-03-10 01:50 PM


It's a shocker, ain't It?

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

GothicCherry
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5 posted 2009-03-10 02:04 PM


Yupps sure is..but let's quit taking over this thread lol
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