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A Descending Interest In Gravity

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Octave
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0 posted 03-03-2009 12:01 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Octave

Peculiar. Possibly a song.

A Descending Interest In Gravity

We will fall through a hole
Made in the sky for us
Weíll fall through everything
Just because we must

Weíll take a slice of fear
And weíll chew it as we fall
Flailing through air
Ignoring every call

So Iíll hold onto you
Just donít you hold onto me
As we race against gravity
In bitter symphony

Falling, falling, falling
Tearing up the sky
Taste the wind in our mouths
We donít even have to try

So Iíll hold onto you
Just donít you hold onto me
As we race against gravity
In bitter symphony

No wings to break our fall
Shredding atmosphere
Weíre eating up the space
Swallow non-existent fear

And we will fall together
Falling through the sky
Carefree and delicious
We donít want to fly

So Iíll hold onto you
Just donít you hold onto me
As we race against gravity
In bitter symphony
Falling, falling, falling
Donít hold onto me
We will fall together
In bitter symphony
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1 posted 03-03-2009 12:53 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

This has the flavour of a villanelle.  Why not try and make it one?
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2 posted 03-04-2009 11:26 AM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Dont want to sound stupid, but what is that?
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3 posted 03-04-2009 02:29 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Don't worry, you sound far from stupid.  It's a very difficult poetic form.  I'm hoping Christine will have a shot at one soon, .

Here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

Check out two famous ones:

Dylan Thomas's "Do Not Go Gentle into that Good Night", and

Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art"
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Oooh, this is pretty. I like it.
 
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