I'm impressed sweety, you are doing well and learning fast.
This is a very good write and I am truely amazed at the
improvement.....You go girl
Hmmm....couple spots here to think about:
Are they "pleasant"? Perhaps needed, desired, yearned for,
Because the reader doesn't see the experience as "pleasant"
it is better understood (In my mind) as a yearning by the narrator
in the poem.
..''..just reading this again this is really great.
"bleeding the healed"
Not sure about this one.....might need to be clearer.
You certainly don't need my help anymore though and I am proud of you.