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Teen Poetry #9

Her name; My thoughts.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-03-01 11:39 AM

I don't know about this one.. I was just venting.. I don't think I have a ending stanza to be honest.. But I couldn't think of anything.. lol
Her name resides on my lips
Forever in my head
Whispering on the wind
As moonlight shines on my bed

I listen to the calm sound
And hear her laughter lite the sky
A sunrise so beautiful
It blinds my eyes

Stars will twinkle
But never come close to her eyes
As I lay in this field of hope
Watching the moon rise

Fireflies play along the creek
And you bask in the star light
Her smile lifts veils of darkness
Like the moon shining bright

KandyGrl511
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since 2008-11-30

Posts 52
Michigan

1 posted 2009-03-01 07:07 PM

i like this...

<3 i love u<3

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

2 posted 2009-03-01 08:18 PM

I like how you ended it. It fits well. This is really pretty.

nina1522
Member

since 2009-02-14

Posts 189

3 posted 2009-03-01 08:51 PM

god ive never experienced any feeling remotely like this. ive read several of your poems and they are very good. who ever this person you are writing about is very lucky

freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

4 posted 2009-03-01 11:48 PM

This is good for a vent, love the ending.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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