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Phase Between Life and Death

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Elias Nevermore
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0 posted 02-28-2009 11:24 PM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elias Nevermore


Broken down by a gunshot
heard across an open plane,
a human shatters as he
hits the final barrier.

Crimson flood emerges out
from the breathless crater
with glass shards scattered
in the endless chasm of chaos.

Dead soul cedes from body
as fragile life withers away,
the container turns to dust
leaving only death and decay.



"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

[This message has been edited by Elias Nevermore (03-01-2009 11:15 PM).]

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Nice Imagery
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2 posted 03-03-2009 09:55 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Really nice imagery!!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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Wow, this is really good, love the imagery as well.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

Elias Nevermore
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4 posted 03-03-2009 07:45 PM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elias Nevermore

hahaha, thanks you guys.

I really tried to make sure that the imagery conveyed the transition between life and death accurately.

I appreciate your feedback
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