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0 posted 02-26-2009 09:16 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy


Haha, this is what comes out of my butt, when I have writerís block, itís horrible.

A tiny leaf bud had fell beside me
So pretty, nice-looking thing I had thought
Its was almost plain,but there was more there
Though soon to die life shined through a lot

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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1 posted 02-26-2009 09:28 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.......What to say what to say.........
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2 posted 02-26-2009 09:35 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

My thoughts exactly Michaela!! xD I really don't know what to say Christine.. lol

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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3 posted 02-26-2009 09:39 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

yup, yup, yup! well what do i expect. lol

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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4 posted 02-26-2009 09:46 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Poem Farts!!! Lol...

I doubt anyone would EVER expect that from me...Lol...
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5 posted 02-26-2009 09:47 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Haha, too funny, I love poem farts.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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6 posted 02-26-2009 09:51 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Poem farts give me wings!! Lol jk jk

We need to be de-hypered lol
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no i like my hyper me, but maybe i should be a lil de-hypered lol

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.
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8 posted 02-26-2009 10:04 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

HA! Well, I'll enjoy this why I can before I get depressed again over that poem I did terribly on.
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9 posted 02-26-2009 10:08 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

yeah, i'm trying to enjoy this too, sadness hit me this week and i dnt think its done yet, i hope i have more poem farts, lol!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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10 posted 02-27-2009 04:19 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Christine!  I am not sure you really want to hear what I think about this gem (splutter).  I can be pretty, umm, caustic yanno when I want to be.
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Hey go right ahead if you have time to waste, i like knowing everyone's opinion, but if you have no time, then you should hold off on your causticness for something else.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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12 posted 02-27-2009 05:56 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Lol Christine, it doesn't take me long to tell you what you already know, which is that this is so excruciatingly ungrammatical as to be almost unreadable.  Whatever poetry you write, whether light and funny or dark and serious, you should at least make sure your grammar is ok.

In fact on second thoughts after reading again, it's not just the grammar, the syntax is weird in places, and, well, it reads as borderline nonsense.
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My butt knows no grammer nor syntax, I forgot to teach it that, but I'll put it on my to do list.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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14 posted 02-27-2009 06:20 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

good idea Christine
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15 posted 02-27-2009 08:30 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

I don't think I taught much grammer to mine either...I'll get on that...
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