'Where laughter rang down every hall
Your smile lit up the room
Now broken furniture and drunken words
Leave this place an empty tomb'
I loved this stanza, it gave me a great picture in my mind.
I thought this poem was rather good actually. It seemed to drag on a little, and it started off stronger than it ended. maybe cut out a stanza or something? Rymthm was minorly off in a few places, but you said you were'nt too worried about that.
Nice poem, great imagery.