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When I'm Gone.... There's No Heartbeat For The Broken!

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RevengeIsMine
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Australia


0 posted 02-24-2009 05:46 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine

I'm not sure if this is confusing if it's sorry.. i'd explain what it's about but it's just too long of a story lol.. It's crappy.. I CAN'T WRITE AT ALL ANYMORE!... SO HERE IT IS..

_______________________________________________

When I die do not mourn
For I have not left at all
I am the warmth in the summer
And the breeze in the fall

When I die do not bury me
For the worms wonít like the taste
Scatter my ashes in the Aussie wind
So my beauty wonít be a waste

When I die do not fear
For I will always be the same
Laughing, crying, smiling
Dancing in the rain

When I die Iíll die happily
For I am the girl you once loved
The angel of your big blue eyes
I am more than flesh and blood

When I die there will be no battles
For I was never yours at all
I may have gave you everything
But you gave me nothing at all

When I die there will be no crying
Only promises of whatís left to come
You broke me into a million pieces
But i'm not leaving you with one
© Copyright 2009 A Typical Aussie Chick - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-24-2009 08:06 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

It isn't that confusing. But not your best work. Don't give up hope hon.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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2 posted 02-24-2009 08:17 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

well...tsk tsk for thinking it was confusing.
i understood it completely and i loved it, all of it.
library.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

Belinda
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since 01-30-2006
Posts 126
UK


3 posted 02-25-2009 12:16 PM       View Profile for Belinda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Belinda

Long time, I haven't been online in forever,
missed you writing

This was really well written, the last stanza added a twist to the poem.

Can't write anymore? rubbish!
Not your best, but you never fair to disappoint.

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

GothicCherry
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since 09-16-2008
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TN


4 posted 03-03-2009 08:48 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

You can too write still...

I really enjoyed this...
 
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