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Jostrei
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0 posted 2009-02-23 08:49 PM


My Addiction


My Addiction,
Is The Look in your eye,
My Addiction,
Is The Heat Between us...

I'm Addicted,
To the Distraction you bring,
The Way Life Doesn't matter,
The Way The World Comes to a stop...

My Addiction,
Is the Passion In Your Soul,
My Addiction,
Is The Feelings You Bring,
Just From Entering The Room...

I'm Addicted,
To Just The Little Things You Do,
I'm Addicted,
To Everything about You...

I'm Addicted To Loving You,
I'm Addicted To The Little Things,
From The Smiles and Way You Say My Name,
To The way You Kiss...


I Cant Stop My Addiction,
Or I'll Fall Apart,
My Little Distraction,
My way to Escape,
A Higher Level Of Living,
Just a Few of the Things you are...
To An Addict Like Me.

I'm Addicted,
To The Way Your Eyes Sparkle,
When Your Lost In the Moment,
I'm Addicted,
To The Way Your Lips Move,
When Your Over Me...

Your My Own Personal Addiction,
A Habit That Slowly Consumes Me,
Your My Favorite Way,
To Spend My Morning,
Day,
And Night...

I'm Addicted,
To My Distraction,
I'm Addicted,
To Your Soul,
Your Heart,
I'm Addicted,
To Everything about you,
Addicted...
To Loving You...

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1 posted 2009-02-23 09:32 PM


this made me grin

I can soooo relate!

very nice poem

Jostrei
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2 posted 2009-02-23 09:35 PM


Thanks
Its complete Free-verse So There's No Real Pattern.
I Hope everything flows Together okay.

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3 posted 2009-02-23 09:46 PM


it's awesome. Sometimes it flows best in free thought
GothicCherry
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4 posted 2009-02-23 10:49 PM


Yay!! I'm not the only romantic teen with lustful gestures lol welcome to PIP
Jostrei
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5 posted 2009-02-24 06:25 AM


Thanks Cherry,
I'll be posting More today but I gotta get to school for now lol.

Any Grammar Issues or Ideas on how to make my poems better are desired. Please and Thank You

GothicCherry
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6 posted 2009-02-24 08:24 AM


Well, I would quit capitalizing words in the middle of the sentence and try to go by some sort of pattern so that it will flow better. I found the flow a bit hard to follow.
Jostrei
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7 posted 2009-02-24 07:17 PM


The letters are a habit when typing I don't mean to it kind of just happens.
I'll watch that from now on.

I don't know much about form, I usually just free verse and write what seems to fit.
Guess I've got some studying to do lol

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8 posted 2009-02-24 10:26 PM


We all have studying to do if we wish to get better.
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