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No da,dums. No pattern. Just raw emotion here.. I would finish writing but i sorta broke down a little. Please forgive me... this poem sucks...

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Those cool summer nights
Stars captureing our sight
Held my heart on my sleeve
Praying you would just stay
I miss what we had together
Promising each other forever
It feels like eternity passed by
And these feelings can't lie
Memories left on replay
I'm just slipping away
Death swept you off your feet
Stealing away my heart beat
Rotting in regret
Memories won't let me forget
You vision won't go away
Why didn't you stay?
Tears mimic the rain
I can't get rid of this pain
  
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I'm sorry you are hurting.

it's never easy, it hurts for a long long time when someone we love, passes. time is about all we can do. think good thoughts when it starts to hurt. Remember how that person made your life better just by being in it.
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Raw emotion sometimes need to projected without structure, that's why we have free verse.

I'm sorry you're hurting, my friend. But like SEA said, if you can ride the storm and remember those lost with love and not regret then you can pull through and do honour to their memory.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

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quote:
Raw emotion sometimes need to projected without structure, that's why we have free verse.

Macbeth: Act 1, Scene 5

"The raven himself is hoarse
That croaks the fatal entrance of Duncan
Under my battlements. Come, you spirits
That tend on mortal thoughts, unsex me here,
And fill me from the crown to the toe top-full
Of direst cruelty! make thick my blood;
Stop up the access and passage to remorse,
That no compunctious visitings of nature
Shake my fell purpose, nor keep peace between
The effect and it! Come to my woman's breasts,
And take my milk for gall, you murd'ring ministers,
Wherever in your sightless substances
You wait on nature's mischief! Come, thick night,
And pall thee in the dunnest smoke of hell,
That my keen knife see not the wound it makes,
Nor heaven peep through the blanket of the dark,
To cry "Hold, hold!""

Tell Shakespeare that he couldn't project raw emotion in a formal setting!

All poetry can project all emotion.  Some people have this idea that free verse is anarchic in every sense.  I don't think this is the case at all.  I write mostly free verse, but to write well in free verse I find harder than say writing a sonnet.  FV is not simply about starting to vent the first thing that comes into your head and calling it a poem.  That way simply leads to prosey rants or self indulgent diary entry "poems".  Anyway that's just my opinion as always.
 
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