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Manipulative love, it is who I was!

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freeand2sexy
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First of all let me state that I wrote this before Moonbeam assigned me a blank verse (of 50 lines)and also that I wrote this as a vent and didn't want to care about pattern or meter, tho I ended up having a pattern. So critiques are welcomed, but only about the wording, and not about meter.


Manipulative love,
A craving sense, to feel what shouldnít be felt,
But it is who I was,
A staggering, life of games, to which I dealt.

Enough is not this lust;
No satisfaction, left to fill empty hearts.
A thirst for my own trust,
Not a tactic found, on our devious charts.

Like foolís gold inside me,
A fragile replica, of adoration,
Though its picture fancy,
Itís only a sick gag, a hoaxed creation.

But it is who I was,
Deception, erratic beats you shouldnít feel.
Manipulative love,
An old me, scheming with sin, to swap whatís real.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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1 posted 02-19-2009 05:20 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Oh my God!!! I love the wording in this!! I dare say that you are by far wayyyy better at wording than I am! lol
Great job!!!!!!!!!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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Thanks Zach, it means a lot, especially coming from you.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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