How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Main Forums
 Teen Poetry #9
 garden of light
 1 2 3
Follow us on Facebook

 Moderated by: Acies, Dopey Dope, SEA   (Admins )

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

garden of light

 Post A Reply Post New Topic   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
purefiction
New Member
since 02-17-2009
[First Post] 1
Florida


0 posted 02-17-2009 04:40 PM       View Profile for purefiction   Email purefiction   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for purefiction


Garden of needles bloom and
stab native vegetation.
Light rays reflect off thin shards
squinting gray eyes
of guilty bystanders
as they collapse,
fertilizing innocent soil.
Keen edges breach the earth
rising to the face of man to
sew chapped lips.
Their muffled voices impair responses
to my questions
as I sprint above the surface
of sharp edges.
No sin to weigh my body down
to a porous sponge.
Floating alone, the needles grow and warp,
upholstering the earth apart,
cross-stitching breathing bodies
into a fantastic quilt.
Nothing strong enough to
cut through roots that strangle the core.
The world seizes it's rotation;
blinding other worlds.  

-Alex

© Copyright 2009 purefiction - All Rights Reserved
Falling rain
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 01-31-2008
Posts 2165
Small town, Illinois


1 posted 02-17-2009 05:05 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Hey! Welcome to Piptalk. I really like your imagery in this poem! You paint a pretty picture. Keep it up!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member
since 09-12-2008
Posts 703
CA, USA


2 posted 02-17-2009 05:29 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Wow, you have very good imagery in your poem.

"No sin to weigh my body down"

This is my favorite line.

Oh and welcome to Pip!!!


With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.
SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 01-18-2000
Posts 24152
with you


3 posted 02-17-2009 05:55 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

loved the ending...very nicely done Welcome to Pip

*please check your email for a special greeting!
purefiction will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply Post New Topic   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Main Forums >> Teen Poetry #9 >> garden of light Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors