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My first (short) poem in trochaic tetrameter(I think)

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100 posted 02-23-2009 05:38 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Hey Christine don't worry about timing.  Whenever you have time is fine.

Meanwhile I'm wishing I hadn't said anything about "soul", but now I have I'd better explain a bit more where I'm coming from.

The point is that most poets are chock full of emotion and they just love to and want to convey that emotion onto paper.  The problem is that it's easy to feel the emotion, it's easy to know what you want to say, but it's not so easy to convey it in an interesting manner to other people.  That's where the skill comes in.

What's happened is that over the centuries certain words and phrases have become used in the same way by countless poets to the point where they have lost all their impact.  

I daresay that when the first poet to use the word "heart" to mean a deep and meaningful feeling all his readers went "WOW, what an awesome metaphor".

Over the years however the metaphor has become tired.  Sure it still stands for a deep feeling, but it's not specific.  One poet's heart is exactly the same as another poet's heart to the reader.  Sure the poet herself knows her emotional state, but by simply using the cliche "heart" she tells her reader nothing about that actual state at all.  

So your task as a contemporary poet is to find new ways to convey the specifics of your speaker's emotions.  And similar considerations apply to the other words I mentioned.  

I hope this makes some sense.  I'm a little tired right now, so I might not be totally clear.

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101 posted 02-23-2009 05:42 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Makes perfect sense!

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102 posted 02-23-2009 06:10 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

This is my first time down here to see you guys Hi,  


Hi Free,

Think of it as the rhythm of a song. If you can sing it and it carries the same beat all the way through. Then it is probably in meter.

This is trochaic teterameter:

THUMPthumpTHUMPthumpTHUMPthumpTHUMPthump
Life is hard and I am weakness

THUMPthumpTHUMP
Life is hard

See it?
  
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103 posted 02-23-2009 06:13 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Yeah, I totally get it! thanks

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[This message has been edited by freeand2sexy (02-23-2009 07:31 PM).]

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104 posted 02-23-2009 08:03 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Free,

When I started verse I had a difficult time identifying what is a stressed and an unstressed syllable.

Something that helps is to look at the word forms.

If you want, Go here and scroll down to my post that starts "Hi, chopper,"

http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum28/HTML/002418.html


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105 posted 02-23-2009 08:24 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Thanks for the help, the but I think I get which syllables are stressed or not, unless you have another reason to believe I don't, which I thought I proved I did in my blank verse in CA (though I did have a few mistakes).

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106 posted 02-23-2009 11:12 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Turtle- Thanks for putting that link up here. Christine pretty much knows what she is doing with the stresses, but I'm still a little scratchy so it helped a bit.
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107 posted 02-24-2009 07:05 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Hi free,

Yeah, It was the "Before" in L2 and the "Waiting alone" in L4

and I thought your blank verse poem was good.

  


I can be so stupid sometimes......

Sorry Cherry , You're welcome

[This message has been edited by turtle (02-24-2009 09:37 PM).]

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