I've watched your poetry grow with great interest Zach, you have a fantastic gift for imagery.
I have to agree with Freeand2sexy, learn to experiment with different meters and rhyme structures. I started off writing rhymeless 'Stream of Conciousness' poetry in the dark section and after finding love again afte my fiancee's death five years ago and learning the techniques of rhyme and meter, I think I've improved.
I think you will too. It's at least worth a shot.
Here's to a bright future Zach.
Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.