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markita
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since 02-11-2009
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0 posted 02-14-2009 12:56 AM       View Profile for markita   Email markita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for markita


I am ready for love
Why are you hiding from me
I'd quickly give my freedom
To be held in your captivity

I am ready for love
All of the joy and the pain
And all the time that it takes
Just to stay in your good grace
Lately I've been thinking
Maybe you're not ready for me
Maybe you think I need to learn maturity
They say watch what you ask for
Cause you might receive
But if you ask me tomorrow
I'll say the same thing

I am ready for love
Would you please lend me your ear?
I promise I won't complain
I just need you to acknowledge I am here

If you give me half a chance
I'll prove this to you
I will be patient, kind, faithful and true
To a man who loves music
A man who loves art
Respect's the spirit world
And thinks with his heart

I am ready for love
If you'll take me in your hands
I will learn what you teach
And do the best that I can

I am ready for love
Here with an offering of
My voice
My Eyes
My soul
My mind

Tell me what is enough
To prove I am ready for love

I am ready
*I.A.*

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rebelangelv
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1 posted 02-14-2009 01:01 AM       View Profile for rebelangelv   Email rebelangelv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rebelangelv

ooooooooooo me like!!! great write! and welcome to piptalk!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

Octave
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since 07-29-2008
Posts 188
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2 posted 02-14-2009 02:15 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Hmm. I can relate to this on a certain level. Nice work.

'I am ready for love
Why are you hiding from me
I'd quickly give my freedom
To be held in your captivity'

Probably my favourite stanza.

'I am ready for love
If you'll take me in your hands
I will learn what you teach
And do the best that I can'

Quite liked this part also.

'I am ready for love
Here with an offering of
My voice
My Eyes
My soul
My mind'

I wasn't too sure about this part. I don;t know. In my opinion, it just didn't quite fit with the flow of the poem. Hmm. I dont know.

Nice piece of writing anyway. (:
Suncleaver
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since 01-18-2009
Posts 480
Stafford England


3 posted 02-14-2009 10:53 PM       View Profile for Suncleaver   Email Suncleaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suncleaver

Being 22 I don't usually visit this forum, but this work caught my eye as a startlingly mature and emotional love poem.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

GothicCherry
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since 09-16-2008
Posts 471
TN


4 posted 02-15-2009 10:41 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

The last stanza confused me a bit. At lest, I THINK that's what threw me off. It seemed out of place in a way. I really enjoyed reading this though. It was well worth the time.
freeand2sexy
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since 09-12-2008
Posts 703
CA, USA


5 posted 02-15-2009 01:58 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Wow, this is really good, but i have to agree with the rest, the last stanza didn't seem to fit.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

KandyGrl511
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since 11-30-2008
Posts 52
Michigan


6 posted 03-12-2009 03:23 PM       View Profile for KandyGrl511   Email KandyGrl511   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for KandyGrl511

i liked a lot....
stacylynn418
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since 03-06-2009
Posts 40
new york


7 posted 03-14-2009 02:38 PM       View Profile for stacylynn418   Email stacylynn418   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stacylynn418

i think this is all very well written, and is something a lot of people can relate to.
the first stanza is definitly my favorite
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