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markita
New Member

since 2009-02-11

Posts 7
washington

0 posted 2009-02-14 12:56 PM

I am ready for love
Why are you hiding from me
I'd quickly give my freedom
To be held in your captivity

I am ready for love
All of the joy and the pain
And all the time that it takes
Just to stay in your good grace
Lately I've been thinking
Maybe you're not ready for me
Maybe you think I need to learn maturity
They say watch what you ask for
Cause you might receive
But if you ask me tomorrow
I'll say the same thing

I am ready for love
Would you please lend me your ear?
I promise I won't complain
I just need you to acknowledge I am here

If you give me half a chance
I'll prove this to you
I will be patient, kind, faithful and true
To a man who loves music
A man who loves art
Respect's the spirit world
And thinks with his heart

I am ready for love
If you'll take me in your hands
I will learn what you teach
And do the best that I can

I am ready for love
Here with an offering of
My voice
My Eyes
My soul
My mind

Tell me what is enough
To prove I am ready for love

I am ready
*I.A.*

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2009-02-14 01:01 AM

ooooooooooo me like!!! great write! and welcome to piptalk!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

2 posted 2009-02-14 02:15 PM

Hmm. I can relate to this on a certain level. Nice work.

'I am ready for love
Why are you hiding from me
I'd quickly give my freedom
To be held in your captivity'

Probably my favourite stanza.

'I am ready for love
If you'll take me in your hands
I will learn what you teach
And do the best that I can'

Quite liked this part also.

'I am ready for love
Here with an offering of
My voice
My Eyes
My soul
My mind'

I wasn't too sure about this part. I don;t know. In my opinion, it just didn't quite fit with the flow of the poem. Hmm. I dont know.

Nice piece of writing anyway. (:

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

3 posted 2009-02-14 10:53 PM

Being 22 I don't usually visit this forum, but this work caught my eye as a startlingly mature and emotional love poem.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

4 posted 2009-02-15 10:41 AM

The last stanza confused me a bit. At lest, I THINK that's what threw me off. It seemed out of place in a way. I really enjoyed reading this though. It was well worth the time.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

5 posted 2009-02-15 01:58 PM

Wow, this is really good, but i have to agree with the rest, the last stanza didn't seem to fit.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

KandyGrl511
Member

since 2008-11-30

Posts 52
Michigan

6 posted 2009-03-12 03:23 PM

i liked a lot....

stacylynn418
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 40
new york

7 posted 2009-03-14 02:38 PM

i think this is all very well written, and is something a lot of people can relate to.
the first stanza is definitly my favorite

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