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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


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Tagged by Standards...Now I'm It.

Lately, I'm
so passionate.
Wrapped up, like an assembly-line gift box,
in all my thoughts.
My doubts.
My hurt. My love.
Me. Me.
Me.
Until I break
away from the comforts of
me.

And the strands are undone;
the wrappings torn by hands so nimble, I
don't notice.

A few days
ago, I would've scoffed. But
It doensn't feel that way.

It sits. Unmoving. Unthinking. Undoing.
Understanding.
A model of society. (I would have said conformity.)

And here's something else
I would have enjoyed
laughing at:
They expect it to pick
up the strands; the wrappings.

Have they no sense?
It is. No weaver.
(useless.)
It weaves. No more.
(junk.)
It makes. No sense.
(nothing.)

It is
so routine. Not even
a hint of passion.


2/5/09
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Falling rain
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1 posted 02-05-2009 09:32 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

This made me think a lot, in a good way of course. I like your wording in this poem. Very intriguing..

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

freeand2sexy
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2 posted 02-06-2009 08:07 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

I really liked this, it's very interesting!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

Octave
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3 posted 02-07-2009 03:13 PM       View Profile for Octave   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Octave

Makes me wonder...

Very curious. I'll have to get back to you on this one. Good stuff.
Clockwork_Orange
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4 posted 02-08-2009 12:04 PM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange

wow. that about all i can muster up after reading this. amazing.
Assassin_of_Verse
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5 posted 02-12-2009 02:14 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Falling Rain: Thanks, but most of my wording just comes out on it's own. It's mostly fluff though if i don't filter it.
Freeand2sexy: Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it.
Octave: It's always nice to hear that my work gets someone other than me thinking. :]
Clockwork: Thank you for ur kind opinion, but my work pales compared to urs.

There is power in the pen.

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