What?!? This is crap?? Honey.. Your writing puts my work to shame. I thought it was pretty good. Of course not your best but its far from crap. Only one critic is that the title related to nothing in this poem.. It was very random. lol
When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.
that So Cal
Sorry, but I refuse to accept this as anything but excellent! (or some other worthy adjective.) This was well written, and had a smooth rythym. Well, maybe the 4th stanza was a little iffy, but all in all, i enjoyed reading it.
There is power in the pen.