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GothicCherry
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0 posted 01-28-2009 07:17 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for GothicCherry


You may have changed my style
and brightened up the view.
Yet, thereís still no smile
This isnít me, but you.

My hair is lighter.
My heartís still cold.
You say Iím brighter.
Youíre voice is getting old.

Iíve never cared much
For your book of ethics.
I want out of your clutch,
But Iím in your gaze transfixed.

Youíre as good as can be.
And Iím good as well.
The dark just calls me.
Iíd like to remain in the spell.

Do you understand?
I hope you get it now.
Iím through with your demand.
Time to be me somehow.
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1 posted 01-28-2009 08:21 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

This poems is good. But to be honest this poem just confused me.. The only thing I understand was the beginning stanza and the final line... everything in between was just confusing for me..

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

freeand2sexy
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2 posted 01-28-2009 11:25 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

It rhymes nicely but i have to agree with Zach, its a bit confusing, i think i kinda get most of it except for the 4th stanza.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

GothicCherry
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3 posted 01-29-2009 06:58 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Lol! Seems like I'm the one talking in riddles now... Most of my closest frinns get it. My mom has changed a lot of stuff about me. I used to dress in only black and red and skulls and crosses. Mom won't let me anyone though and I'm rather tired of changing for her...Thanks for tha comments
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4 posted 01-29-2009 07:11 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Lol, sorry for what your going through with your mom, She can try to change the outside, but no one can change what's inside, and what's inside is the most important part of you!!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

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5 posted 01-29-2009 09:43 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Lol. Freeand2Sexy that goes twice for me. People are valued for whats on the inside. Keep shining that inner light hun! :P lol

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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6 posted 01-30-2009 08:48 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Thanks guys!! =]]
 
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