navwin » Main Forums » Teen Poetry #9 » Another Vampire Poem
Teen Poetry #9
Post A Reply Post New Topic Another Vampire Poem Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Falling rain
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-01-26 10:35 PM


rose and blood Pictures, Images and Photos

As I lay in silent agony
Quenching blood to fill my veins
A never ending lust for this venom
As it leaves me wrenching in pain.

My heart lays silent in my chest
A constant reminder of my past
Now to live for eternity
Forever as an outcast.

Mortals fear me
Once they see my smile.
Hush now my darling
It'll only last a while.

Blood gone cold
Eyes filled with fire.
For I am the one and only.
Legendary vampire.

© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
GothicCherry
Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
1 posted 2009-01-27 08:08 PM


Sweee-eet!! I really enjoyed this..

I like that it isn't very long because I normally get bored reading long poems; however, the content was interesting enough to where it could bear a few more stanzas without losing the reader I'm sure.

A few places should probably be punctuated differently, but besides that I can't think of anything to pick on.

abhursty
Junior Member
since 2009-02-25
Posts 45

2 posted 2009-02-25 10:26 AM


It sounded really good.
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Main Forums » Teen Poetry #9 » Another Vampire Poem

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary