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Its all but a memory now
How you captured my heart
And used it against me
found it and tore me apart.

Its vague and familiar at once
I try to forget it all
But it doesn't want to let me go
You just wanted to see me fall

I held on to you
Trusted you. Believed you
The tables turned
Now I'm the one to lose

I should of saw this coming
I'll be more cautious next time around.
Bitter tears are left to dry
falling without a sound.

Its all but a memory now
How you captured my heart
And used it againt me
Found my weakness and tore me apart.



© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-21-2009 08:51 AM       View Profile for prettypinkrebel   Email prettypinkrebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prettypinkrebel

This was a good write. I could feel the emotion you had when writing it. Nice Job
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oh zach, i hope you're feeling better than last night, cuz you got me super worried then.
great poem, really felt the emotion in this one...if flowed really well too.
ttyl

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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Damnn I Hope Your Alright Zach.. I Know How Your Feeling, ATM lifes hurting me and i'm barely breathing through the pain.. i'll try n catch up with u today.. if i don't then be strong.. i know julianna's gunna look after you..
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4 posted 01-22-2009 09:46 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thanks for your comments. Jess I'm going to get a councilor soon. By today I should know he/she is. Hopefully they'll be able to help me get over this whole suicide thing. Thanks for your help and concern. Love you both!

-Zach  

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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i love it. you put so much emotion into your words. its amazing.
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6 posted 07-24-2009 09:24 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

It had so much life and emotion and sincerity and hurt in it... it was so sad, yet it spoke in such a way that I TOTALLY got where you were coming from... i had a similar experience and your words jus spoke how I felt at the time. I know that you'll b able 2 get over- this poem is one of the very first steps, trust me!
Anyway, it was just a moving poem, love it!!!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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