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LOSTinTHISworld
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0 posted 01-12-2009 08:05 PM       View Profile for LOSTinTHISworld   Email LOSTinTHISworld   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LOSTinTHISworld

sitting in a never ending circle
writing a never ending story
with our never ending emotion
such is beauty
ever word, every smile
every glisten in our eye
but why does it seem
we can only see
each others beauty
and not our own
will no reflection in the mirror
or a rideau street window
ever capture our own beauty
only in each others eyes
will we see our own beauty
so look closely
look in my eyes
do you see
its beauty.

memento mori

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this is a really good poem. i liked the repetition in the first few lines, it drove the point more.
great write!

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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2 posted 01-12-2009 09:57 PM       View Profile for wwzwlmd8   Email wwzwlmd8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wwzwlmd8

i really love the first part but over all i loved the whole thing.

~Indya

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I have to agree with the others. Pretty nice. Keep it up.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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4 posted 01-13-2009 12:47 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Haha, it sounds like a pick-up line at the end. But I must say, this is one of the sweetest and cleverest pick-up lines I've ever read/heard.

This made me laugh, so great job!
Library.

There is power in the pen.

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