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Their own pride

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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 01-11-2009 12:07 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy


The pain that comes because they chastise
How does it feel to hear them chide
What will it take for them to realize
That it all wants to make you hide

They’ve pushed and pushed into chaos
Though they disavow their part
How they’ve made you insecure
Now left with a broken heart

What pride they have to act blameless
As though their doings were for the best
They ignorantly coerce you
To work when you desperately need rest

Easily they can weaken you
Taking sleep and stealing time
You’re so compliant to do
All they want, losing your mind

Why can’t you be cognizant?
Are you blind to what they do?
Is your common sense distant?
To how this will destroy you

The pain that comes because they chastise
How does it feel to hear them chide
What will it take for them to realize
That this pain comes from their own pride



With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.
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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


1 posted 01-12-2009 01:31 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Although there was a strong theme througout ur poem, the rhyming seemed forced in almost every stanza. This was okay, but I'm sure that u can make this much better.
Thanks for sharing! I'd love to see more.

There is power in the pen.

Abbeon
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Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder


2 posted 01-12-2009 05:17 AM       View Profile for Abbeon   Email Abbeon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Abbeon

Okay, I need to answer that, and i can't But when i do, I let i soak through my mind.

Rebecca-Jade

Words have power, Im going to unleash the power of my soul.

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