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Falling rain
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0 posted 01-08-2009 07:36 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Staring out the window
Hiding within my mind
Searching for an answer
That I don't think I'll find.

I'm starting to think
That love isn't right for me
There's not that "one person"
that makes my weak in the knee's

No lover to hold my heart
A person to be with me to the end
No that's not what I'm here for
I don't need anything more then a friend.  

No matter how much I long for it
No matter how many times I dream
Relationships always start out fine
but then tear at the seems

I write out my feelings
and I'm doing my best to cope
But I'm starting to give up on it
I'm starting to see there's no hope

Love has forsaken me
But in the end I don't really care
I have a life to live
I don't need someone to be there.

[This message has been edited by Falling rain (01-08-2009 09:07 PM).]

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1 posted 01-08-2009 08:47 PM       View Profile for Marc-Andre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marc-Andre

Falling Rain, considering that this is the teen poetry forum, aren't you much to young for these thoughts? What if I told you that I am 36 and just found the one last year? But you have the heart of a poet and emotions you'll live and explore. Here's what I think is the perfect title for your poem: SOUR GRAPES. You explored the feelings well, and I think such a title with enhance your poem. Have a marvelous day. And keep writing Mark
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2 posted 01-08-2009 09:18 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

First off, call me Zach. I don't like using my formal user name. lol. Second of all, Yes "Sour Grapes" sums up the poem quite nicely. And yeah everyone has their "sour moments" and I guess I was just in one of those moods. lol I know its not hopless but I was just in one of those moods I guess. Thanks for reading and for the title suggestion!

-Zach  

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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You're welcome Zach Of course we have those moods...otherwise much good poetry would be lost Take care, Mark
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4 posted 01-09-2009 07:24 PM       View Profile for crimsonXnails   Email crimsonXnails   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crimsonXnails

i absoulutely love this poem, and dearly miss reading ur work. keep on keeping on,
!tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

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wow! i love this one! you did an excellent job with the wording and the flow of it, amazing job once again.
library!

(and i know how your feeling sometimes)

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

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ahww Zach hunni amazing loved this =)
Krysti
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7 posted 01-12-2009 07:21 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Seriously dude, this is like...the second best poem you've ever written. I love it.
and even tho you haven't found someone yet, that doesn't mean that they're not out there. You've still got many years to live my friend. Maybe time is the best solution to this one....?
Hope you find ur answer.
[library.]
{~~*~~}


Emmalee Janelle
   {~~*~~}

[This message has been edited by XxForever.BrokenxX (01-14-2009 12:21 AM).]

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8 posted 01-27-2009 10:34 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

I am glad Mark told you that these thoughts were too aged for you. Now I don't have to say the same thing. Lol... Hope is always there even if you say something is hopeless in the back of your mind you always have slight hope. Those moods come and go a lot huh? I get them all the time.
 
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