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Can you feel?

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freeand2sexy
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since 09-12-2008
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CA, USA


0 posted 01-08-2009 07:27 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy


Can you feel any different
Left in this cold, cold world
Can you feel alive again
Left lost in your own war

You struggle
And you fall
Stuck, behind
The brick wall

You're cautious
But still bleed
You can move
But can't see

Can you feel my warm touch
Or are you paralyzed
When is it all enough
For you to realize

You can crawl
But won't stand
You will fall
But won't land

You're cautious
But still brake
You can feel
But it's fake

Can you feel; can you move
Stuck in this position
Your whole life is consumed
Left without decisions

You struggle
And you trip
Barely move
Unless whipped

You can feel
You can move
It's all real
If you choose

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

© Copyright 2009 Christine Juarez - All Rights Reserved
Marc-Andre
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since 12-07-2008
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1 posted 01-08-2009 08:50 PM       View Profile for Marc-Andre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marc-Andre

Freeand2sexy, nice to see you posting again   You are improving. Even with irregular meter and slant rhymes, your poem has a nice flow and it reads well. Have a marvelous day! Mark
rebelangelv
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since 05-28-2007
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2 posted 01-08-2009 08:54 PM       View Profile for rebelangelv   Email rebelangelv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rebelangelv

this was really good!!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

wwzwlmd8
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since 09-23-2006
Posts 96
San Diego,CA


3 posted 01-12-2009 04:52 PM       View Profile for wwzwlmd8   Email wwzwlmd8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wwzwlmd8

I LIKED IT A LOT

~Indya

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