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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 01-08-2009 10:48 AM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

Through the trees she cries quietly
as the world crashes down on her.
Everything sheís ever learned,
has turned out to be the lie of all lies.

People abandoned her,
she's left by herslef.
No one to save her,
she'll die there alone.

I see her scream in
the horror that she's in.
It looks as though she's given up,
please I hope she hasn't.

That's not what she wants to do,
I can see it in her eyes.
But she see's no other way out,
so soon she'll make her decision.

Deeper and deeper
into the ground she sinks.
Harder and harder,
she's dying now her death.

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

© Copyright 2009 Julianna - All Rights Reserved
prettypinkrebel
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1 posted 01-08-2009 10:50 AM       View Profile for prettypinkrebel   Email prettypinkrebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for prettypinkrebel

this is really a good write i like it and can totally identify with the peice of work. thanks you keep it up. library
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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2 posted 01-08-2009 05:35 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

thanks! glad you liked it! it was something i wrote in like...5 minutes at school when my homework wasn't working, so to me its not my greatest, but yeah, thanks!

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

Falling rain
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3 posted 01-13-2009 08:35 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Not your greatest??? Pfft! Whatever!!! This was pretty good I think!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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4 posted 01-13-2009 11:27 AM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

well thank you zach. i'm glad you liked it, lol.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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5 posted 01-15-2009 09:46 AM       View Profile for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed

I really liked this, it was a good piece by you.

-Kate

ps library good.

"Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?"

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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6 posted 01-15-2009 04:58 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

thanks kate! i'm surprised people like this one, lol. i don't...haha.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

RevengeIsMine
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7 posted 01-15-2009 06:20 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Well Well here we are.. me commenting on one of ur poems for the first time in ages.. I've been so busy i've read n not commented so now i get a super long sappy comment.. not that theirs much to say...

Love this poem.. it's prob one of ur best in a while... Your writing is developing each time i read ur work which is really great.. Soooo with all that said and done i have one last thing..

*Gosh Your Pretty*!!  (lol)

xx
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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8 posted 01-15-2009 06:22 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

haha, aww!!! thanks so much!!! for both the poem "critique" and the compliment on my picture, lol.
i'm really glad that you liked it!!! (both, lol)

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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