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young_blood
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0 posted 01-06-2009 06:43 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for young_blood

Bound

The night is in pursuit
again,
through these alleyways
confined by buildings sagging
like gallows in a nuclear wind.
It moves quicker with steps so
silent
as to put a mute to shame.
It's pulse becomes electric
as it sways from side to side
dodging delusional derelicts.
The darkness
swallows swollen shadows
and hems my path to home.
My pulse becomes electric.
My lungs drink despair.
The combination provides reason
to move to the beat insisted
by the hangman's secret.
It's a violent dance.
Two pulses meet,
Two sparks fly.
This beat becomes electric,
bloated by two tangled together.
The darkness and myself,
sensual in all senses,
becoming more so by the minute.
The beat is pounding in my head
though no one else seems to be moved.
The night seems to insist on
continuing this carnal spar.
For the moment,
I agree.
© Copyright 2009 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


1 posted 01-07-2009 12:49 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

After reading this, I started humming to myself. It was like I was keeping the dark away with my humming...Lol, just sharing how some of the things I got from this.
I really liked it. Especially the two pulses and two sparks.

There is power in the pen.

young_blood
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2 posted 01-07-2009 08:09 AM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

It's always encouraging when poems have an effect on the reader. Humming is cool.
crimsonXnails
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dark/little/heavan.:*:.


3 posted 01-08-2009 03:06 PM       View Profile for crimsonXnails   Email crimsonXnails   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crimsonXnails

*sigh*... now i remember why i miss this place. excellent as always!
!tracey!
crimsonXnails
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dark/little/heavan.:*:.


4 posted 01-08-2009 03:07 PM       View Profile for crimsonXnails   Email crimsonXnails   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crimsonXnails

*sigh*... now i remember why i miss this place. excellent as always!
!tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

young_blood
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5 posted 01-09-2009 08:13 AM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

Oh boy, two posts! Thanks tracey!
crimsonXnails
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dark/little/heavan.:*:.


6 posted 01-09-2009 03:36 PM       View Profile for crimsonXnails   Email crimsonXnails   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crimsonXnails

lol, srry, 'twas an accident, but it deserved 2!
young_blood
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7 posted 01-09-2009 03:41 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

Haha...It's ok! It makes it look like I've got a ton of replies, maybe more people will read it then!
crimsonXnails
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dark/little/heavan.:*:.


8 posted 01-09-2009 07:29 PM       View Profile for crimsonXnails   Email crimsonXnails   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crimsonXnails

well they'd better or they'll have to face with the terrible wrath of the feary queen(aka: me tossing them a dirty look)!! mwahahahahaha! im very uh... hyper i guess you could call it, this evening. srry<3
!tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

Earl Robertson
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9 posted 01-10-2009 11:43 AM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

Alex you know I'd always read your poems! This poem deserves a really creepy backtrack, like thriller!

(oh yeah sorry about the implied comparison to Micheal Jaxson...it couldn't be helped)

My melancholy is purely my own

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10 posted 01-10-2009 05:02 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"as it sways from side to side
dodging delusional derelicts."

I read that and got shivers down my spine. lol very good work.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

young_blood
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11 posted 01-12-2009 09:57 AM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

Thank you all for reading. I really do appreciate it. Ty reading this while listening to Southern Comfort by Burial. It's what inspired it.
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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amazing write. the words you used flow so well and everything works incredible. the meaning is astounding, great job!!
library..

.:~]Julianna[~:.

waiting for you to notice me, touch me, hear me, love me...ask me for something other than gum.

 
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