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pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06
Posts 513


0 posted 2009-01-05 10:02 PM


My life was just okay
Before you came along
Then it was like...
Wow...So this is what it's like to be alive
For what seems like a few moments
-a few precious moments-
     I mattered

But it was a secret
I wasn't allowed to see you
Or anyone else for that matter
But we tried
And that tiny detail meant more to me
Than...almost all the hugs in the world

You said maybe later...
When it's allowed...
When I turn 16...
Three months and thirteen days
But I can't help but wonder
Will you still love me by then?
Do you love me now?

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Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal
1 posted 2009-01-05 11:12 PM


If this actually happened(s), I hope that things work out well for you!

Liked ur poem, reminded me of my style (but less shakey). Not really much to say...
Except good job and good luck!

There is power in the pen.

pandabear
Junior Member
since 2009-03-08
Posts 36

2 posted 2009-03-11 12:40 PM


I hope it all works out for u and it is really good and how u wrote it and that this is true for alot of people and it is also true for me i like how u put in ur emoton into it
GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
3 posted 2009-03-11 12:48 PM


"And that tiny detail meant more to me
Than...almost all the hugs in the world"

This is sooo something that I would say.

I know the feelings of this well, but not the exact situation.

&& I'm sorry but I have to add this: Good Write! Lol...

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