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Dear, Mr. President (a poem about President Bush)

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Dear Mr. President


Can I ask you some questions?
If you would be so kind
As in to take a break from your life
Come and speak your mind.

For a moment lets pretend
That you weren't anything more then me
Because in the end that's what we are.
Can you take a moment to look the way I see?

Is it me or do you ignore us?
It seems that all too true.
How is it possible for you to sleep
when people are dying; and you always knew?

What do you think..
When you see people sleeping on the street?
How can you hold your head up high
while children can't afford shoes for their feet?

What do you feel..
When your sitting at dinner eating a fine feast
While people are starving in the country.
And disease kills like a beast.

How is it that you get everything you want.
And the rest of us have to work to survive
That you send husbands, father, and sons
to a war.and we pray they'll come back alive.

How come you didn't solve the problems?
Because your the one we use to trust
What happen to all that hope?
Did it all disappear into dust?  

I see the government is falling
But no ones gonna catch you when you fall
Because you let us down Mr.President
We're not gonna be your one last call.

  

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1 posted 01-05-2009 09:14 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

True enough. Before Bush, there was no one sleeping in the streets, no one was starving and there was no poverty or sickness. Darn him!!
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2 posted 01-05-2009 10:49 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Haha, maybe it's a bit harsh to single out Bush for all this, but he didn't do a whole lot to improve it.

Um...The 2nd to last stanza, I think you meant you're instead of your. And happened instead of happen.

And the last line of the last stanza was a little confusing to me.

There is power in the pen.

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3 posted 01-06-2009 07:50 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Yeah. First off, thanks for reading my poem. Second, The last stanza ment like when ever someone is in trouble. For example like stuck in jail. You get one last phone call. And in this poem. I'm saying that America isn't gonna catch Bush when he falls.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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It's pretty cool that you wrote something political. Makes me wanna go listen to Rage Against the Machine.

Only suggestion is to try and improve your flow. It seemed like you were jamming sylables and forcing rhymes. If rhyming is difficult for you, chill on it and try some free verse. Keep writing though!
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My friend Michelle will forever despise you for blaming Bush she told me to let you know after she read this over my shoulder. I like it though. The last line was a bit confusing at first, but how you explained it made me appreciate it a lot.
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Lol. Well Michelle your as free to your opinion as anyone else in this world. lol. Thanks for reading my poems GC.

Much love,

-Zach
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i really enjoyed this, but to be honest i felt  like it was a re-write of pinks  dear mr president. the words have a great impact i just dont feel they were as original as they could have been.
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8 posted 02-03-2009 06:31 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Yeah that was where I got my title from to be honest. But really I didn't listen to that song. Like I knew what it was about so I used that as my subject. So its possible if it does sound like it. Thanks for reading though!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

 
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