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Beauty Concealed In Mechanics

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Ri
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since 02-01-2008
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Blackburn, England


0 posted 01-05-2009 10:31 AM       View Profile for Ri   Email Ri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ri

I stare into the abyss,
of the fluidity showing my reflection,
Feeling nothing but the cruel wind against my face,
yet nothing lasts forever, and forever is nothing.
I am deserted but for my own image,
staring straight back at me, unmoving, unforgiving.
The water beckons me to come closer,
to distort my only companion,
to feel the icy grip of death.
I realise how quiet it is,
with no mechanical faces directed at me.
My isolation is short-lived,
as I watch a soaring creature,
swoop from Heaven to take life.
Unmoving, unforgiving, like nature itself.
Yet it isnít respected, isnít noticed,
like the pathetic life of anybody who tries to be somebody.
All that is fair must fade, and all that are loved must diminish.

I stare into the abyss,
of the fluidity that shows my reflection,
waiting for my saviour to swoop down from heaven,
yet they could presently walk this land,
unknown, unloved, seeking the very same joys.
For we are placed on this world,
with so little seen and so much done.
The most beautiful things remain unknown, unloved.
I am not alone, but in public solitude.
Faces donít disguise their pity;
mechanical smiles donít disguise their revulsion.
They think it odd,
to find someone alone, friendless
Unnatural.
Yet this is where I love to go;
It is the most natural part of life that I know.
Alone, I admire the solitary beauty
But for the many mechanical mouths Ďmerryí
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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


1 posted 01-05-2009 10:59 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

"Faces don't disguise their pity" Nice.

Ur poem was thought provoking and made me read it over again. For example:
"I stare into the abyss,
of the fluidity showing my reflection,"

That kinda threw me off. When u say abyss, are u refering to a deep, bottomless hole? or is it a deep well/lake?

I also liked the optimistic twist at the end. :] All in all, good job.

There is power in the pen.

Ri
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since 02-01-2008
Posts 67
Blackburn, England


2 posted 01-08-2009 04:18 AM       View Profile for Ri   Email Ri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ri

I'm referring to a lake
Thankyou for your input, and for your kind words
GothicCherry
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since 09-16-2008
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TN


3 posted 03-20-2009 09:06 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

'Alone, I admire the solitary beauty'

This line says a lot for me.
 
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